Obama Care was put into act in 2010 and only has until January 1st for its insurance expansion. Although a great attempt to improve the health care system, it will not necessarily improve America's health. Life expectancy has increased, but death due to poor health has increased as well to 45% in 2010. Americans are living longer, but they are living longer with diseases. Things such as COPD, obesity, and drug disorder have all risen up on the chart of top reasons for death. The top reason for disease is a bad diet. Americans have a lower life expectancy than those in other countries. There is more to the problem than the price of health care and it will take more than a single bill to fix this problem. The question is what else has caused this pandemic and how can we fix it.
There is more to the problem than the affordability of health care It is also about improving things such as diet and exercise. Money will not buy anyone a health lifestyle. America's pandemic on health needs a bigger solution than making medical attention more accessible. It will take effort from everyone. Changes need to be made: eating more fruits and veggies, taking in less carbohydrates and sodium, exercising more. Money is inconsequential to the reform of America's eating habits. It will take hard work from everyone to have temperance towards unhealthy foods. Everyone will have to get up and get active. Ones health is not something that should be taken lightly. There needs to be more of a serious attempt at fixing this problem.
http://www.economist.com/blogs/democracyinamerica/2013/07/disease-and-death-america
Health is definitely affected by an individual's lifestyle and if he or she decides to live healthy or not. Admittedly I also think that the major goal of Obamacare has been lost in the increasing deterioration of health lately. Your commentary is well executed, and to make it stronger you might want to focus more on explaining the effect of Obamacare and its controversy, as that is what the main articla is about. Structurally, I appreciate your transition from one topic to the next in two paragraphs, so all in all great blog!
ReplyDeleteI agree that Obamacare was a great attempt to improve the health care system but failed to do so. I like how your commentary was well-expressed and how you gave a solution to the problem, instead of just discussing or summarizing the topic. However, your summary seems to take much of the first paragraph. Overall, like what Shivani has said, your transition from one topic to other in the two paragraphs are smooth and created "a strong bridge" between them.
ReplyDeleteAlthough you summarize quite a bit, the portions that you show your opinion have very adequate analyzation. I agree on your stance. Obamacare initial purpose was to help the country and in some ways it has. Your use of statistics "45%" was very relevant as well.
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